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• Paragraph 2： • Hearing my words, Mrs Sather looked at my eyes as if seeing my inner
self locked away inside. • __________________________________________________________
• Paragraph 1： • When I was loading up my packpack, Mrs Sather asked me to go to
her._______________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________
源自文库
• 4.对话描写占比重大，废话多 • 解决方法：无助情节推动的，偏离人物性格的和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
• 1-2处对话即可。
范文第一段
1. Confused, I nodded and hurried to join her. • confused 为形容词做伴随状语，为情感描写。nod and hurry 并列两个谓语
• 此处主要运用心理描写，包括连续两个问号的使用，很细腻地刻画了自己 当时的难以置信，害怕的心理。用到了词组be terrified at sth对..很害怕
• 范文第二段 • 1.She said，”But I had you in mind for Dorothy while writing the play! If you
用到了句型 I was surprised that从句
3. Me, the lead? Was she crazy? I was terrified at the thought of standing on stage in front of all those people. I told her that it seemed really hard because I was never good at talking in front of people.
• I looked out at the smiling faces packed into the school hall. Flashes from the cameras lit up in all directions. The applause filled my ears. I had done it. I really had done it. Just a few months earlier, I would never have pictured myself acting in a play in front of two hundred people. But when the time came, I got up on stage and faced one of my greatest fears and discovered I could do more than I ever gave myself credit for. I found a new person inside me, a much more daring, outgoing person who had been hidden all along, just waiting for the opportunity to appear.
really don't want to, I won't make you. It's your choice.” • 这是第2处语言描写。 • 2.My mind was spinning fast. Mrs Sather, whom I loved and admired, wanted
me in this role. She believed in me. I realised it was time to throw off my shy mask and show the world who I really was. • 此处主要运用心理描写，描写地很细腻。此处用到了一个非限制性定语从 句。
有关自信的句子积累
• 1. The greatest prison that people live in is the fear of what other people think.人最大的牢笼常常是由对别人看法的恐惧铸成的。
• 2.The best way to defeat your fear is to face your fear head-on迎面. • 3.Never underestimate低估 yourself, for you have no idea what
• My teacher always encouraged me to write more. She told our class to go after our dreams and dig in with both hands. I think she was one of the first people to see my inner strength. One day, she announed that our class was going to perform a play she had written. “I‘ll begin to cast everyone tomorrow,” she said. “I need someone who is not afraid to be on stage in front of a lot of people to play the lead part of Dorothy. Anybody want to try?” A few excited hands shot up—mine, of course, was not one of them— and Mrs Sather smiled. “We'll talk more about it tomorrow,” she said. Then the bell rang and my classmates slowly left the classroom.
• 3. She was right and the performance was very successful. And I overcame my inner fear as well.
• 最后点题。 在文章中出现了fear， afraid， shy， inner strength， inner self等关键词，可以提炼这些关键词，稍加修改化为己用来升华主题收尾。
__________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________ ___
读后续写出现的问题以及解决方法
• 1.描写角度少，导致描写不细腻，不深刻。
动作，为动作描写。
2. Mrs Sather said, “I was thinking you would be perfect for Dorothy. But I was surprised you didn't raise your hand.” 此处为1处语言描写。用到了词组be perfect for sth很适合..
you are capable of能力.
• 4.Throw off your shy mask and show the world who you really are.
• 解决方法：多维度描写
动作、情感、心理、语言、环境等方面的描写
• 2.内心冲突没有很好的展现出来
• 解决方法：通过老师的劝说和自己的内心戏的斗争过程来体现。不要老师一劝说，自己没 有内心挣扎过程直接同意，要放大内心冲突，刻画好内心戏，也就是心理描写要细腻。
• 3.与人物性格、身份不符
• 解决方法：写作之前一定要分析好人物角色的性格，所言所行都要贴合人物性格和身份。 本文作者是一个害羞的人，如果直接对老师说“Absolutely not”来回绝老师的要求，不符合 人物的性格。而用“I...I don't think...I am right for the part”这种表达就能很好表现作者的不 自信。
• If not for my teacher, Mrs Sather, I might never have found that opportunity. In the first and second grade, I was extremely shy. I had friends, but it just wasn't in my personality to be very outgoing , even when I knew someone well. I was afraid I would do or say something wrong, so usually I just smiled and listened to other people's conversations. I did well in school and I loved to write. However, I would escape into my writing, where I could be myself and never had to worry about what other people thought of me. In my stories, I was never shy.
self locked away inside. • __________________________________________________________
• Paragraph 1： • When I was loading up my packpack, Mrs Sather asked me to go to
her._______________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________
源自文库
• 4.对话描写占比重大，废话多 • 解决方法：无助情节推动的，偏离人物性格的和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
• 1-2处对话即可。
范文第一段
1. Confused, I nodded and hurried to join her. • confused 为形容词做伴随状语，为情感描写。nod and hurry 并列两个谓语
• 此处主要运用心理描写，包括连续两个问号的使用，很细腻地刻画了自己 当时的难以置信，害怕的心理。用到了词组be terrified at sth对..很害怕
• 范文第二段 • 1.She said，”But I had you in mind for Dorothy while writing the play! If you
用到了句型 I was surprised that从句
3. Me, the lead? Was she crazy? I was terrified at the thought of standing on stage in front of all those people. I told her that it seemed really hard because I was never good at talking in front of people.
• I looked out at the smiling faces packed into the school hall. Flashes from the cameras lit up in all directions. The applause filled my ears. I had done it. I really had done it. Just a few months earlier, I would never have pictured myself acting in a play in front of two hundred people. But when the time came, I got up on stage and faced one of my greatest fears and discovered I could do more than I ever gave myself credit for. I found a new person inside me, a much more daring, outgoing person who had been hidden all along, just waiting for the opportunity to appear.
really don't want to, I won't make you. It's your choice.” • 这是第2处语言描写。 • 2.My mind was spinning fast. Mrs Sather, whom I loved and admired, wanted
me in this role. She believed in me. I realised it was time to throw off my shy mask and show the world who I really was. • 此处主要运用心理描写，描写地很细腻。此处用到了一个非限制性定语从 句。
有关自信的句子积累
• 1. The greatest prison that people live in is the fear of what other people think.人最大的牢笼常常是由对别人看法的恐惧铸成的。
• 2.The best way to defeat your fear is to face your fear head-on迎面. • 3.Never underestimate低估 yourself, for you have no idea what
• My teacher always encouraged me to write more. She told our class to go after our dreams and dig in with both hands. I think she was one of the first people to see my inner strength. One day, she announed that our class was going to perform a play she had written. “I‘ll begin to cast everyone tomorrow,” she said. “I need someone who is not afraid to be on stage in front of a lot of people to play the lead part of Dorothy. Anybody want to try?” A few excited hands shot up—mine, of course, was not one of them— and Mrs Sather smiled. “We'll talk more about it tomorrow,” she said. Then the bell rang and my classmates slowly left the classroom.
• 3. She was right and the performance was very successful. And I overcame my inner fear as well.
• 最后点题。 在文章中出现了fear， afraid， shy， inner strength， inner self等关键词，可以提炼这些关键词，稍加修改化为己用来升华主题收尾。
__________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________ ___
读后续写出现的问题以及解决方法
• 1.描写角度少，导致描写不细腻，不深刻。
动作，为动作描写。
2. Mrs Sather said, “I was thinking you would be perfect for Dorothy. But I was surprised you didn't raise your hand.” 此处为1处语言描写。用到了词组be perfect for sth很适合..
you are capable of能力.
• 4.Throw off your shy mask and show the world who you really are.
• 解决方法：多维度描写
动作、情感、心理、语言、环境等方面的描写
• 2.内心冲突没有很好的展现出来
• 解决方法：通过老师的劝说和自己的内心戏的斗争过程来体现。不要老师一劝说，自己没 有内心挣扎过程直接同意，要放大内心冲突，刻画好内心戏，也就是心理描写要细腻。
• 3.与人物性格、身份不符
• 解决方法：写作之前一定要分析好人物角色的性格，所言所行都要贴合人物性格和身份。 本文作者是一个害羞的人，如果直接对老师说“Absolutely not”来回绝老师的要求，不符合 人物的性格。而用“I...I don't think...I am right for the part”这种表达就能很好表现作者的不 自信。
• If not for my teacher, Mrs Sather, I might never have found that opportunity. In the first and second grade, I was extremely shy. I had friends, but it just wasn't in my personality to be very outgoing , even when I knew someone well. I was afraid I would do or say something wrong, so usually I just smiled and listened to other people's conversations. I did well in school and I loved to write. However, I would escape into my writing, where I could be myself and never had to worry about what other people thought of me. In my stories, I was never shy.