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出现的问题
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法； 符合情景否？）
1 afraid; nervous; frightened 2 catch, catch up, catch up with 3 “Get into the car quickly, man!” said Paul.
改卷经验
卷面； 段落，字数； 衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间） 故事发展 准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；
符合情景否？）
出现的问题
衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间） 故事发展
准确性（用词；句子结构；语法； 符合情景否？）
出现的问题
衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间） 故事发展
童话式的 寓言式的 无厘头式的 戏剧式的
审体裁：记叙文
C. Exposition （说明文）
审时态：一般过去时
审前文大意以及要点
a story (when, where, who, what, how)
who: Mac his friends Paul and Becky when: on a bright, warm July afternoon where :from his home to Alaska what: took a trip and adventured why: enjoyed the life
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Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing open his tent hag. He fired at the wolf a second time,
The provided beginnings
Para 1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
Para 2: A few minutes later, the other two cyclists
arrived.
结伴骑行---独自遇狼--Para 1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
what:
heard, saw, fount out, fired, fired again,
pedal hard, waved and yelled
heard，pulled
a story: beginning; 结伴骑行---独自遇狼---
பைடு நூலகம்
development; 奋力逃生
ending
逃出，感受
Para2: A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
评分标准
1 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度 2 内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的
应用情况 3 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性 4 上下文的连贯性
Writing style
A. Narration（记叙文） B. Argumentation （议论文）
got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac
heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of
it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards
and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passin cars but was careful not to show down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh. At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when
away now.
注意： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of
the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed
was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they
Whose car was it ? Why did it stop? How did Mac feel ? What would Mac do ?
Para 2：A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. What did they see? What would they do?