写作基础 1

雅思基础写作1

Academic Writing的特殊要求

英美拼写混用

英式-se结尾/美式-ze结尾

英式含有-our的单词/美式用or

英式-tre结尾/美式ter结尾

文体错误

剑八例句：

Therefore this cannot be the responsibility of the parents alone.

1)所有格’s 不属于缩写

2)一些默认的源自拉丁文的缩写可用

e.g. –for example, i.e. –that is to say

用词无特色

Young people's crime→youth crime/juvenile delinquency

crime→offence(criminal activity)

harm→damage(The UK was blamed for undermining international efforts to reduce pollution) The advantages of space research are more than the disadvantages.(outweigh)

表达过分口语化

Scientists have presented lots of evidence for climate change.

many/a large number of

a great deal of/a large amount of

want（需要）--be eager for, desire

Those who are eager for happiness need noble close friends.

bad（消极的/负面的）--negative, damaging, harmful, deteriorating, inferior

例句：

The inferior medical facilities in some rural areas are harmful to the treatment.

Measures need to be carried out to improve the deteriorating environment.

good（积极的/正面的）--positive, effective, beneficial, constructive, superior

例句：

It is a beneficial practice to set up kindergartens near the communities.

Women are superior than men to some extent.

This enable us to find constructive ways to cope with the challenge.

句式过于干瘪短促

Junk food advertisement are everywhere.They attract the attention of young consumers. (attracting)

They tend to be more independent.This is an important factor in academic study and research.(which)

Lastly, if you can have some questions on artistic works in the museum, you can ask the staff there, which is a useful way for you to acquire the knowledge about a time-honored art.

修订表达：

Lastly, if people have questions about artistic works in the museum, they can ask the staff there for help, which is an effective way for them to satisfy their curiosity.

情感色彩过分强烈

So,we should make sure that globalisation does not threaten our own tradition!

I don't think so,do you ?!

Nothing is impossible!

逻辑论证使用不当

We must be friendly to others because the Bible said，’Treat your neighbours as you would like to be treated.'(proverb)

议论文必备三大环节

立论提出观点

分论论证观点

结论总结观点

WRITING TASK 2

Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. Do you agree or disagree that the benefits outweigh its disadvantages?

观点：

Although foreign study is not something which every student would choose, it is an attractive option for many people.

论据：

Benefits:

forefront research and advanced technology

（前沿的科学技术研究）

different cultures and a wider range of horizon.

（感受不同文化，开拓眼界）

a brighter future on career

（光明的就业前景）

Drawbacks:

hard to get used to local life, e.g. homesick, no friends, language difficulty

（异国他乡，孤独难耐……）

quite costly, heavy financial burden for parents

（开销巨大，父母负担）

young students may misbehave since no family is around

（无拘无束，肆意妄为）

结论：

Disadvantages are temporary , and if they’re overcome, the experience and academic gains will benefit students for their life time.