写作指导-廊下中学-My beloved person

My beloved person 写作指导一、审题审题可以从以下四方面展开：文体、要求、人称和时态题目：Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “My beloved(最喜欢的) person. ( 以“我最爱的人)”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文符号不占格。

)（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。

）Suggested questions as a guide:1) Who is he/she?2) What does he/she look like?3) What does he/she do?4) Why do you like him/her?5) What can you learn from him/her?文体：从题目可以看出这是一篇议论文。

要求：在题目中给出了相关的问题。

首先，把这些问题用完整句回答；其次，加上适当的上下连接；最后，想让文章出彩，就必须对它进行“精雕细琢”。

人称：my beloved person, 人称一般要用he或者she时态：本文主体用一般现在时二、内容写人物这一类文章可以从人物的年龄、外貌、职业、爱好、学习工作等方面展现人物鲜明的个性。

叙述的原则一般是从外到内，即从外貌描写到人物性格特征描写。

教学生列提纲：1. My beloved person is XX.2. 外貌描写: 一至两句话，eg, My mother is an middle-aged woman, ofaverage height, but very fit.3. 介绍工作: eg. She works in a small factory, but she’s always busy and tired.4. 喜欢他或她的原因5. 从他或她身上学到的东西(四五两题可以结合起来回答，第五题可以作为喜爱他的最后一个原因，注意使用正确的关联词)6. 总结三、词汇1. 描写外貌：beautiful, pretty, good-looking, charming, sweet, handsome, funny2. 描写身高：medium height 中等身材; average height 一般身材;below average 低于平均身高; tall 高的; short 矮的; tallish 有些高的;middle-sized 身高中等的of medium height 中等身材;3. 描述体型:fat, thin, slim, big, small, of medium build, strong, well-built等.4. 描述眼睛：deep-set 深陷的; sunken 凹陷的; bulging/protruding 凸出的; eyelashes 睫毛; eyebrows 眉毛.5. 描述头发:(1) 发型（hair style）:straight 直的; curly 卷发的; pigtails 辫子; crew cut 平头; bald秃头的。

eg. Her hair is brown and curly. 她有着一头棕色而卷曲的头发。

(2) 发色(hair color):jet-black 乌黑的; fair 金色的; blonde 淡黄色的; golden 金黄色的; dyed 染色的;brunette 浅黑色的; mousey 灰褐色的; chestnut 栗色的.6. 描述工作: work as a teacher, work hard7. 描述人物性格：independent 独立的, out-going 外向的, active活跃的, creative 有创造力的，polite 有礼貌的，gentle 温和的，intelligent 聪明的，responsible 有责任心的，honest 诚实的，warm-hearted 热心的，friendly, helpful, patient8. 英语作文中描述人物爱好的词汇favourite; dislike/ like; enjoy / be fond of ; love / like doingbe good at; hate; be interested in; be crazy about四、关联常用的衔接词：1.引出文章：nowadays, It is adj. to do sth. I think, as we all know2.承接上文：also/too, of course, in fact, in other words, besides, in addition, what’s more,furthermore, more importantly3.转折：however, yet, though/ although, but4.举例: for example (跟句子)，such as (跟短语)5.因果：therefore, That is to say…6.对比：while, on the other hand7.总结：for these reasons, generally, in a word, as the famous saying goes (如以下著名的谚语所说), all in all, in conclusion五、优秀句子常用谚语：A friend in need is a friend indeed. (写朋友)All word and no play makes Jack a dull boy. (写如何享受生活)Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise. (养成生活好习惯)Where there is a will, there is a way. (写志向)It’s never too late to learn. (学习的重要性)可以用以下短语引出谚语：As the famous saying goes, …适合本文的优秀句子：1.My beloved person is my mother. Like many other Chinese women, my mother is diligent.2.In order to teach well, she prepares her lectures very carefully and often works so late atnight.3.My mother is very kind and sincere.4.When they have difficulties, she is always ready to lend them a helpful hand.5.She expects me to be useful to the people in the future.6.She is a little overweight.7.Her hair is jet-blacked and straight.8.She has a very pleasant smile and she always has a twinkle in her eye.9.She really cares about other people and is an extremely talented listener.10.He is not very strong but healthy and full of energy.11. He is easy to get along with.12. He is not only tall but also strong.13. Her dream is to be a dancer14. She always smiles when she speak to us .Sometimes she is very strict with us,when we makea mistake, she often makes us stand up.六、典型错误1.没有注意单复数：she always help me.2.What can you learn from him/ her? 不会使用learn from 回答：I learn work hard from myEnglish teacher. I can also learn respect all living things.3.断句：In order to make me not feel tired.4.主格和宾格混乱使用：I can learn a lot from she.5.such as 和for example 混乱使用：… such as be more responsibility, we shouldn’t wastewater and so on.6.不知道如何回答what does he/she look like? 有些学生会这样回答：She looks like ofaverage height, and thin.七、范文修改前：My beloved person is my brother. He is twenty years old. He looks like very thin. He is friendly. He is a worker. He works in a big shop. I like my brother because he always buys some nice food for me. He often cares for me. He likes playing computer games. So do I. I can learn from some useful things from my brother. I like my brother.修改后：In my opinion, my beloved person is my brother. He is a twenty-year-old boy with short blank hair. Now he is a worker in a big shop. He is hard-working as he always listens to the customers patiently and speaks to them politely. In addition, I think my brother is very friendly and helpful. For example, he always teaches me how to play computer games. What’s more, I’ve learned how to care for others from my brother. For these reasons, I like my brother best.其他优秀作文:1. There’s a person I love best. She’s my dear mother. She’s thin, and of average height. She works as a worker. Every day she has to work for 14 hours. Although the heavy work makes her tired, she always cares about my study. That’s why I love her best. What’s more, she often tells me to be an honest person. That’s what I’ve learned from her. Day by day, my mother gets older and older. However, my love to her only becomes deeper and deeper.2. My beloved person is my father. He is a common worker who is over forty. Although he is tall and thin, he is very fit. I like him for many reasons. For example, when I can’t work out difficult problems, he will help me. He explains about them patiently. What’s more, he is an interesting man. He can make me happy all the time. Therefore, I like him best. I can also learn how to care for others from my father.3. My beloved person is my mother. She is of average height. She has short brown hair. In my opinion, she is very beautiful. She is a worker. She works hard all the time. I like her because she always takes good care of me. When I’m in trouble, she will help me. Although she is a worker, she always works hard. What’s more, she is a very kind woman. I can learn kindness and responsibility from her. Therefore, my mother is my beloved person.4. Everyone has his or her beloved person, and my beloved person is my father. Although he is about 40, he looks like a young person. He is a policeman and he usually catches thieves. I like him because he always gives me a hand when I meet difficulties. He always tells me to be an honest person. And I can learn how to deal with problems from him. In a word, he is my beloved person.。