Practiceinrevisingsentences讲义

1. Using parallelism
We painted the trim in the living room; the wallpaper was put up by a professional.
We painted the trim in the living room; a professional put up the wallpaper.
miles a day. …
3. Using specific words -Activity
Example : Several of our appliances broke down at the same time.
Our washer, refrigerator, and television broke…
1. Using parallelism
Grandmother likes to read mystery novels, to do needlepoint, and browsing the Internet.
Grandmother likes to read mystery novels, to do needlepoint, and to browse the Internet.
Consistency with verbs Consistency with pronouns
2. Using a consistent point of view
-Consistency with pronouns
Tip: Any person, any place, or thing, as well as any indefinite pronouns such as one, anyone, someone and so on…
10. If we’re not careful, we’ll leave the next generation polluted air, contaminated water, and forests that are dying.
2. Using a consistent point of view
electronic equipment. 4. Several sections for the newspaper were
missing.
3. Using specific words -Activity
1. Salty snacks are my diet downfall. 2. I swept aside the things on my desk to
A balanced series of to verbs: to read, to do, to browse
Balanced verbs and word order: We painted . . .; a professional put up . . .
1. Using parallelism- Activity
Practice in revising sentences
Revising sentences
1. Using parallelism 2. Using a consistent point of view 3. Using specific words 4. Using active verbs 5. Using concise words 6. Varying your sentences
Example: Chocolate makes me gain weight, lose my appetite, and breaking out in hives.
1. Using parallelism- Activity
1.The novelty store sells hand buzzers, plastic fangs, and insects that are fake.
1. Using parallelism
The game-show contestant was told to be cheerful, charming, and with enthusiasm.
The game-show contestant was told to be cheerful, charming, and enthusiastic.

---sight, hearing, taste, smell, touch
3. Using specific words
He sold his camper. Luke sold his Winnebago.
3. Using specific words
The flag moved in the breeze. The flag fluttered in the breeze.
1. Using parallelism
1. Using parallelism
My job includes checking the inventory, initialing the orders, and to call the suppliers.
My job includes checking the inventory, initialing the orders, and calling the suppliers.f view
-Consistency with pronouns
2. Using a consistent point of view
-Consistency with pronouns
1.During the border crisis, each country refused to change their aggressive stance.
electronic equipment.
3. Using specific words -Activity
1. Salty snacks are my diet downfall. 2. I swept aside the things on my desk to
spread out the road map. 3. Our neighbor’s family room has a lot of
3. Using specific words -Activity
1. Salty snacks are my diet downfall.
3. Using specific words -Activity
1. Salty snacks are my diet downfall. 2. I swept aside the things on my desk to
spread out the road map. 3. Our neighbor’s family room has a lot of
electronic equipment. 4. Several sections for the newspaper were
missing. 5. The doctor examined various parts of my
2. Many people share the same three intense fears: being in high places, working with numbers, and speeches.
3.To decide on a career, students should think closely about their interests, hobbies, and what they are skilled at.
6.Tom’s last job offered security; a better chance for advancement is offered by his new job.
7.People in today’s world often try to avoid silence, whether on the job, in school, or when relaxing at home.
spread out the road map.
3. Using specific words -Activity
1. Salty snacks are my diet downfall. 2. I swept aside the things on my desk to
spread out the road map. 3. Our neighbor’s family room has a lot of
3. Using specific words
A man strained to lift the crate. A heavyset, perspiring man strained to lift the
heavy wooden crate.
3. Using specific words
That woman jogs five miles a day. That fragile-looking, gray-haired woman jogs five
2.People often take a first-aid course so that we can learn how to help choking and heart attack victims.
3. Using specific words
3. Using specific words
4. At the body shop, the car was sanded down to the bare metal, painted with primer, and red enamel was sprayed on.
1. Using parallelism- Activity
5. To become a dancer, Lola is taking lessons, working in amateur shows, and auditioned for professional companies.
Four ways to make your sentences specific
1. use exact names
2. use lively verbs
3. use descriptive words (modifiers) before
nouns
4. use words that relate to the senses
8. Because the dying woman was dignified and with courage, she won everyone’s respect.
1. Using parallelism- Activity
9. The politician trusted no one, rewarded loyalty, and was dependent only on his own instincts.
1. Using parallelism
A balanced series of -ing words: checking, initialing, calling
A balanced series of descriptive words: cheerful, charming, enthusiastic
Thesaurus for synonyms Extensive reading
3. Using specific words
Thesaurus for synonyms

A richer vocabulary
Extensive reading
3. Using specific words