2017-2018学年高中英语 Unit 1 Women of achievement Section V Writing-人物描写讲义 新人教版必修4

2．用to ensure＋that宾语从句改写句4
To_ensure_that_I_can_concentrate_on_my_study,_my_father_ does_whatever_he_can_for_me.
3．用so＋adj./adv.置于句首引起倒装改写句7 So_deeply_moved_was_I_that_I_couldn't_help_bursting_into_ tears.
6．concentrate_on/focus_attention_on/devote_oneself_to/be_a bsorbed_in 集中精力
7．move/touch/affect 感动 8．burst_into_tears/be_filled_with_tears/cry_one's_eyes_out 热泪盈眶
写作探究 能力提升区
[文体感知]
人物描写是记叙文的一种。是对人物外貌、个性以及主要 事迹和贡献进行描述。写作时其结构为：
首先，对此人进行简要的介绍，比如生平、事件、职业 等。
其次，挑选出此人一生中比较重要的事迹进行描写，要尽 可能的详细，因为这影响到人们对他的整体评价。
最后，对此人进行客观的评价，包括其人格、贡献以及闪 光点的评价。
Hale Waihona Puke Baidu
[增分佳句]
1．介绍人物的姓名、出身及外貌特征： ①He had fair hair and blue eyes. ②Abraham Lincoln, the son of a poor family, was born in Kentucky on February 12, 1809. ③She is tall and slim with big eyes and curly hair. ④Sue was a young woman who was studying art. ⑤He is a good-looking, kind-hearted man.
medical training and made every effort to help those who needed help.Under her guidance，some charities and shelters were set
up.Her selfless work brought her many awards.She was awarded the Nobel Peace Prize in 1979 for her devotion to getting rid of poverty.Unfortunately，she died of a disease on september 5,1997.As a great woman，she will be remembered for her
[写作规范]
题目要求 假定下周日是父亲节，某英语刊物正在进行“我的父亲” 的征文活动。请按照下面所提供的主要内容，以“我的父亲” 为题，写一篇短文。 1．你父亲是个农村人，50多岁，没有文化，但他很关心你 的学习情况； 2．探望父亲的一次经历； 3．归纳总结父亲的品行。 注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
[写作训练]
假设你校英语刊物开设的专栏Women of great achievements 向同学们约稿。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文来介绍世界著名 的天主教慈善工作者、1979年诺贝尔和平奖获得者特蕾莎修女 (Mother Teresa of Calcutta)：
1．出生于1910年8月27日；一生致力于在各地帮助穷人、 病人，特别是印度的；
2．介绍人物的成就或取得的成绩： ①During her career life, she obtained 132 championships,
including 4 Olympic championships. ②When he was still a boy, he showed great interest in
第三步 句式升级 1．用as a result of which引导非限制性定语从句把句2和句3 合为一句
Although_his_schooling_adds_up_to_no_more_than_one_year, _he_is_quite_aware_that_knowledge_is_of_great_importance_to_y oung_people,_as_a_result_of_which_he_attaches_great_importance _to_my_study_and_always_encourages_me_to_study_hard.
5．有一次他病重，大夫让他在床上休息几天。(主谓结构)
Once_he_was_badly_ill_and_the_doctor_asked_him_to_stay_i n_bed_for_several_days.
6．我回家看望他时，我看到他在地里干活。(when引导时 间状语从句)
When_I_got_home_to_see_him,_I_found_him_working_in_th e_fields.
第一步 审题谋篇 一、审题 1．确定体裁：本文为人物描写； 2．确定人称：本文人称应用第一人称； 3．确定时态：本文应以一般现在时和一般过去时为主。
二、构思 第一部分：简要介绍父亲的情况：年龄、所受教育、重视 知识等。 第二部分：探望父亲的一次经历。 第三部分：我眼中的父亲：简朴、诚实、勤劳。
第二步 遣词造句 词汇 1．in_one's_fifties 五十多岁 2．add_up_to 总共，加起来等于 3．aware 有意识的 4．attach_importance_to/pay_attention_to/take_into_account_ 重视 5．ensure/insure/guarantee/make_certain 确保
literature. ③His stories, most of which are short ones, give people
surprising endings. ④He/She is good at spoken English and even better at using
computers. ⑤Her story tells us that we should value what we have, and try
7．我深受感动，禁不住热泪盈眶。(so ... that...)
I_was_moved_so_deeply_that_I_couldn't_help_bursting_into_t ears.
8．这就是我的父亲，一位简朴、诚实、勤劳的人。(such is ...倒装句式)
Such_is_my_father,_a_simple,_honest_and_hardworking_pers on.
our best to overcome any difficulty in life.
3．介绍人物的影响及人们对此人的评价： ①He became famous for his newly theory. ②The people had come to love him as an inspiring leader. ③We regard him as our model. ④Lei Feng has been praised for his communist spirit.
句式 1．我的父亲五十多岁了，住在农村。(who引导定语从句) My_father,_who_is_already_in_his_fifties,_lives_in_the_count ryside. 2．尽管他受教育仅仅一年的时间，但他深刻意识到知识对 年轻人的重要性。(although引导让步状语从句，that引导宾语从 句) Although_his_schooling_adds_up_to_no_more_than_one_year, _he_is_quite_aware_that_knowledge_is_of_great_importance__to_ young_people.
3．他非常重视我的学习，鼓舞我努力学习。(主谓结构) He_attaches_great_importance_to_my_study_and_always_enc ourages_me_to_study_hard. 4．父亲为我竭尽所能以确保我全身心学习。(whatever引导 宾语从句，in order that引导目的状语从句) My_father_does_whatever_he_can_for_me_in_order_that_I_ca n_concentrate_on_my_study.
2．二十几岁时曾在一所中学教地理；1948年开始接受医学 培训并致力于帮助穷人；
3．在她的指导下，一些慈善机构和收容所被建立；因其一 生致力于解除贫困，她于1979年得到诺贝尔和平奖；1997年9月 5日因病逝世。
注意：1.词数100左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
答案：
Mother Teresa was born on August 27,1910.She devoted her life to helping the poor，the sick and the dying around the world， particularly those in India.In her twenties，she worked in a school，teaching geography.From the year 1948 on，she received
第四步 妙笔成篇
My Father My father, who is already in his fifties, lives in the countryside. Although his schooling adds up to no more than one year, he is quite aware that knowledge is of great significance to young people, as a result of which he attaches great importance to my study and always encourages me to study hard. To ensure that I can concentrate on my study, my father does whatever he can for me. Once he was badly ill and the doctor asked him to stay in bed for several days. When I got home to see him, I found him working in the fields. So deeply moved was I that I couldn't help bursting into tears. Such is my father, a simple, honest and hardworking person.
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