高中英语写作扩句教学内容

扩句的方法

在学习扩句法之前，先对学生进行五个简单句句型，并列句和复合句的专项训练，打好基础。扩句是在基本句型的基础上，添加各种修饰成分，使句子得到扩展，即根据表达的需求增加定语，状语，同位语等成分，或者举例子补充细节内容，或者添加谚语俗语等。

1 1. We arrived in Sanya.

----- We arrived in Sanya, happily and excitedly. (添加副词)

2 2. I like to make friends with my classmates.

------ I like to make friends with my classmates, who have the same interest as mine. (添加定语从句)

3 3. We were happy and returned home.

------- We were happy and returned home after we had finished collecting all the rubbish.(添加状语从句)

4 4. I like reading books.

------- I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.(通过举例补充细节)

5 5. We should study hard.

-------- As we all know, “Practice makes perfect”.So we should study hard.（添加谚语）

6 6. I often join in many activities.

-------- I often join in many activities in order to communicate with other students and broaden my mind. (添加目的状语)

三．具体应用

试题要求：假如你是一名中学生，请以My colorful school life为题，写一篇短文。要求100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总数。

要点提示：1：上课认真听讲

2：课后完成作业

3：经常参加体育锻炼

4：去图书馆阅读

I’m a high school student and I understand what I’m studying for. I have been working hard.

___________________________________________________ ____________________________

May there always be colorful life around my school.

学生的习作：

I’m a high school student and I understand what I’m

studying for. I have been working hard.

I listen to the teacher carefully. I finish my homework after class. I often take exercise. I often read in the school library.

May there always be colorful life around my school.

点评：该学生能完整的写出各个要点，没有出现太大的语法错误，表达通顺，单词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够，没有达到100个字左右，字数不够是很多学生面临的共同问题。其次，句子的表达过于平淡无奇，没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇，固定搭配、固定短语等使表达地道。而且，没有使用连接词，上下文的连接不够顺畅。

改进方法：

步骤一：列要点

把要写的内容要点化，做到要点齐全。

1: Listen to the teacher carefully

2: finish my homework

3:take part in exercise

4: often read in the library

步骤二：造简单句

充分利用五个简单句句型对各个要点进行补充，使

其变成一个完整的句子。每个句子都要注意句子成分的完整性，语法是否正确，说法是否符合英语表达习惯。

1: I listen to the teacher carefully in the class.

2: I finish my homework after class.

3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates.

4: I do some reading in the school library.

步骤三：扩展句子

1: I listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say.(增加目的状语从句)

2: I finish my homework after class, which is a piece of cake for me.（增加定语从句）

3: I often take part in exercise with my classmates, such as playing football, going swimming and

playing badminton etc.（举例说明）

4: I often do some reading in the school library when I have nothing to do after class.（增加时间状语从句）

步骤四：润色句子

根据高考（海南）英语作文评分细则，第五档的要