山东省2020新高考英语大二轮总复习 第四板块 写作 第一部分 应用文写作 第2讲 增加细节的5大高分技巧教案

第二讲增加细节的5大高分技巧

在应用文写作中，增加细节内容的描述是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中，考生一定不能简单地翻译或者仅仅完成所给条目的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够使习作流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。

列举具体的实例进行补充说明

(2019·浙江卷6月·应用文写作)我仍旧记得……

1．I still remember...

→I still remember what you have devoted to improving my oral English and English writing.

2．(2018·浙江卷11月·应用文写作)这是一个黑色的皮革钱包。

It is a black leather wallet.

→It is a black leather wallet with my ID card,2 credit cards and around 200 dollars in it.

3．(2020·宁波综合检测·应用文写作)我想大体上介绍一下中国的传统文化。

I'd like to talk briefly about Chinese traditional culture.

→I'd like to talk briefly about Chinese traditional culture，especially Chinese painting.

4．(2020·台州市第一次质量预测·应用文写作)现在，我想与你分享春节的一些传统风俗习惯。

Now，I'd like to share with you some traditional customs of the Spring Festival.

→Now，I'd like to share with you some traditional customs of the Spring Festival，the most important festival in China.

5．我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。

I'd like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.

→I'd like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.If possible，we can travel together or share traveling experiences.

6．我是一个充满活力的健康男孩，我非常喜欢体育运动。

I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much.

→I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much，especially outdoor activities.Whenever I have time，I'll go hiking or mountain climbing with my

classmates.

7．我要花一些时间和父母在一起。

I'll spend some time staying with my parents.

→I'll spend some time staying with my parents，chatting with them and doing some housework.

[题组过关1]——根据括号内提示完成句子

1．The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.__________________________(我们不仅能阅读国内外的新闻)，but also get information，send emails and attend online schools.

2．Laura is a standard American style.__________________________(她说一口完美的美式英语)，and that's why I am crazy about her.

3．However，it seems people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication.

________________________________________________________________________

(比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流)．

4．However，every coin has two sides，so does the Internet.

________________________________________________________________________

(比如，沉溺于网络也许会影响我们的学习和工作)．

答案：1.We can not only read news from home and abroad

2．She speaks perfect American English

3．For example，many people begin to pay less attention to face­to­face communication

4．For example，being lost in the Internet may affect our study and work

增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、

结果、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容

(2019·北京卷·书面表达)在农场里，我们帮忙摘西瓜。

On the farm，we helped pick watermelons.

→On the farm，we helped pick watermelons.While working I realised how hard it was to work in the fields under a hot sun.

1．(2020·丽水市检测·应用文写作)当我们爬山时所有人都捡垃圾。

All of us picked up the rubbish as we climbed up.

→All of us picked up the rubbish as we climbed up，helping to beautify the