高三复习写作

五. 使用with 复合结构，it is time for ..to do .. After finishing those activities, We will go back by bus.
With those activities finished, It is time for us to go back by bus.
Dear James, Our school will hold an activity called I love Huang Shan, which is of great significance to us. I am writing to invite you to take part in it. After gathering at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning, we will set off for Huang Shan. On arriving there, we are supposed to pick up litter in Mt. Huang Shan. Moreover, we can not only climb the mountain but also take some photos while admiring the beauty of Huang Shan. However, What is the most important is that we should pay attention to our personal safety. In the end, with those activities finished, It is time for us to go back by bus. I hold the firm belief that you will be sure to participate in this activity. Hope to see you
六. 句式升级（I hold the firm belief that…） I believe you will be sure to participate in this activity.
I hold the firm belief that you will be sure to participate in this activity.
Conclusion 1-2句 Body (supporting ideas)5-6句
Writing Task
假定你是李华，你校将到黄山风景区举行 “我爱黄山”（Mt. Huangshan）主题活动。 请你给交换生James发一封邮件告知活动的相 关情况。内容包括： 1. 时间和地点 2. 活动安排 3. 注意事项 注意： 1. 词数100左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
beauty /pay attention to/personal safety
5.On arriving there, we should pick up litter. We can also take some photos, climb the mountain and admire the beauty of Huang Shan. We should pay attention to our personal safety. 6 go back /by bus
开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂
高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求
第五档（21-25分） 完全完成了试题规定的任务: 准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的。
How to present a better writing？
利辛高级中学 高三英语备课组
养眼的…
What makes a good essay?
内容
语法 框架---组织结构 思想
要点全，拓展有度，有效
准确，复杂语法结构， 高级词汇，多种句型
连接词，作文结构紧 凑；流畅
体裁 1. 审题 人称 时态 要求 2. 列提纲/要点 3.连词成句
字数 内容
4.连句成篇
5. 润色修正 6. 定稿
体裁 书信格式 人称 第一为主, 时态 一般现在时为主 要求 字数 抓要点, 100个左右
内容
①学校举行我爱黄山活动. ②邀请James参加此活动.
Para.1 开头 信息1
Para.2 正文 信息2 集合时间地点
结构
信息3
到达之后的活动，捡垃圾， 拍照，爬山，欣赏黄山自然风景 注意安全
信息4 乘公交车返回
Para.3 结尾 信息5 邀请参加，表达期望
开头 ①我们学校将举行活动.
.Our school/hold/activity
①学校举行我爱黄山活动
②邀请James参加此活动
信息1
②活动名称为我爱黄山.
call/I love Huang Shan
6.We will go back by bus.
结尾 信息5
邀请参加，表达期望
Believe /be sure to/ participate / hope to see you .
I believe you will be sure to participate in this activity. Hope to see you
Para.1:Our school will hold an activity. The activity is called I love Huang Shan.
I am writing to invite you to take part in it. Para.2:We will gather at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning. Then, we will set off for Huang Shan. On arriving there, we should pick up litter. We can also take some photos, climb the mountain and admire the beauty of Huang Shan. We are supposed to pay attention to our safety. We will go back by bus.
二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档
We will gather at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning. Then, we will set off for Huang Shan. Gathering at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning, we will set off for Huang Shan.
Para.3:I believe you will be sure to participate in this activity. Hope to see you
Dear James: Our school will hold an activity. The activity is called I love Huang Shan. I am writing to invite you to take part in it. We will gather at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning. Then, we will set off for Huang Shan. On arriving there, we should pick up litter in Mt. Huang Shan. Then, we can also take some photos, climb the mountain and admire the beauty of Huang Shan. We are supposed to pay attention to our safety. After this ,We will go back by bus. I believe you will be sure to participate in this activity. Hope to
三. 使用not only…but also结构，及分词作状语 we can also climb the mountain take some photos and admire the beauty of Huang Shan.
We can not only climb the mountain but also take some photos while admiring the beauty of Huang Shan.
第四档（16-20分） 完成了试题规定的任务: 比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的 写作目的。
Introduction (topic)1-2句
see you
.
Yours sincerely, Li Hua
一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力
二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力 四.尝试多 样化表达方 式 ①强调句 ②With短语复合结构 ③定语从句 ④名词性从句(主宾表同从句) ⑤各种状语从句 ⑥被动语态
一.使用用分词做后置定语，非限制性 定从合并
Βιβλιοθήκη Baidu
③我写信想邀请你参加.
write /invite you /take part in
信息2 集合时间地点 正 信息3 到达之后的活动，捡垃圾， 文 信息4 拍照，爬山，欣赏黄山自然风景 注意安全 ①集合时间地点
. gather/school gate/7 am/Saturday morning. Set off for/Huang Shan
信息2 集合时间地点 正 信息3 到达之后的活动，捡垃圾， ,注意安全 文 信息4 拍照，爬山，欣赏黄山自然风景 乘公交回学校
4.gather/school gate/7 am/Saturday morning./Set off for/Huang Shan 4.We will gather at our school gate at 7 am this Saturday morning. Then, we will set off for Huang Shan. 5. arriving/ be supposed to /pick up litter /take photos/climb mountain /admire the
四. 使用名词性从句（What
that….）
is most important is
We are supposed to pay attention to our safety.
What is the most important is that we are supposed to pay attention to our personal safety.
结尾 信息5
邀请参加，表达期望
Believe /be sure to/ participate / hope to see you
.
① 我们学校将举行活动. 信息1 ②活动名称为我爱黄山. ③我写信想邀请你参加. 开头
①Our school will hold an activity. .
②The activity is called I love Huang Shan. ③I am writing to invite you to take part in it.
1. Our school will hold an activity. The activity is called I love Huang Shan. It is of great significance to us.
Our school will hold an activity called I love Huang Shan, which is of great significance to us.
②到达之后的活动，捡垃圾，拍照，爬山，欣 赏黄山自然风景,乘公交车返回
arriving/pick up litter /take photos/climb mountain /admire the beauty /return/ by bus
③注意安全
Be supposed to/Pay attention to/ personal safety