高中英语-读后续写课件(共27张PPT)
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“Unforgettable”, Says New Journalist Robot – Satisfaction Guaranteed
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
1. M3U2 Come and eat here 2. M7U2 Satisfaction Guaranteed
虚构+趣味 思维+语言
叙事 文本
叙事 人称
第一、二、三人称
文 叙事 体 时态
…
叙事 方式
旁白/对白 口语/书面语
语言定位
记叙类故事文
叙事人称：“第三人”的身份讲述（第三人称作为主语）（直接引语除外）
比如，he, she, it, A funny thing, the young man, Park Avenue, Arthur等
读后续写策略
核心矛盾
情节基调
遣词用句 不着痕迹 语言文体 框架完整
情节走向 顺延逆转
情节内容 框架结构
合情合理 的创意
语篇段落
读后续写策略
1、挖掘情节基调，廓清核心矛盾，创造合情合理的创意故事外延。 2、理清叙事角度，把握顺延逆转，构建张弛有度的完整情节框架。 3、定位语言文体，模仿遣词用句，续写不着痕迹的语用叙事文本。
可能情节发展
1
thief
碰巧抓住抢劫犯（即结尾1）
2
the young man not thief
碰巧把刚从银行取钱赶路的人当劫犯，最后 到警局传来抓到劫犯消息
3 Money
碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人钱的小偷，最后
thief
到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消息，
another man
最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷
4
not thief
路遇一个路人帮人搬运装满钱的行李箱，而 Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会
5 6
the young man
thief not thief
错把普通小偷当劫犯，最后帮助抓到该小偷 错把路人当劫犯（即结尾2）
7
Other things
another man
thief
碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人东西的小偷，最 后到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消 息，最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷
顺延性
a young man
Stop, stop!
…?
Run after
Arthur
To the PS
故事框架
顺延 逆转
Paragraph 1:
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” ______________________________顺__延__故_事__发__展________
材料 Everyone had a different answer 结尾 The police caught the robber
事物状态：“主语+系动词+表语”
材料 Arthur was surprised, Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before 结尾 The man shouting behind is the bank thief, The man was innocent
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
虚拟
单元 课文内容
故事
M1U3 M2U4 M3U2 M3U5 M4U4 M5U3
M5U4
M7U2
Travel Journal – Journey down the Mekong Wildlife Protection – How Daisy Learned to Help Wildlife Healthy Eating – Come and Eat Here Canada “The True North” – A Trip on the “True North” Body Language – Communication, No Problem? Life in the Future – First Impressions Making the News – My First Work Assignment
叙事时态： 转述过去某个时刻所发生的事
用过去式或者与过去式相关的时态（直接引语除外）
比如 was on the way, walked, was surprised, started to run等
叙事方式： 旁白+对白（间接引语+直接引语）[主次分明]
No trouble at all, what happened Go to the police station, Stop stop, Help help。
叙事时态： 过去式 结尾方式：出人意料
Come and eat here Satisfaction Guaranteed
两个语篇的文本比较：
Come and eat here Satisfaction Guaranteed
旁白+对白（旁白为主） 书面语+口语 简单句式，小词常规词 行为变化
全旁白的形式 全书面语形式 复合句式，较高级词汇 情绪（心理）表达
叙事人称：第三人称； 叙事顺序：以时间发展
语言定位
记叙类故事文
叙事文本定位： 语言平实易懂的小故事
小词、常用词以及常见短语
funny VS. amusing，intriguing，diverting
一组数据：
结尾1（153）
adv or prep (behind, suddenly, until, obviously, already, later),
funny: cause amusement, laughter, etc.
(有趣的，可笑的)
“趣”
核心矛盾
Money or
Other things
矛盾中心
“情节核”
发散性
the young man or another man
关键人物
Thief Not thief
矛盾身份
箱子里 所属人
Young man 身份
After placing it on the …, Just as Arthur picked up…
结尾：As he was running…, The moment he go to…, Just as Arthur was describing… 时间提示词如at the moment, then, later等。
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
Come and eat here
WP + his empty restaurant
信息梳理 + 思辨发散
一个可能需要增加的阅读环节
Visit to YH’s + got the problem Do research
New sign and discount Competition was on
Claire didn’t want the robot in her house, especially as her husband would be absent for three weeks, but Larry persuade her or allow her to be harmed. It would be a bonus. However, when she first saw the robot, she felt alarmed. His name was Tony and he seemed more like a human than a machine. He was tall and handsome with smooth hair and a deep voice although his facial expression never changed.
Claire alarmed, disturbing, trust Tony
accompanied, protected, help
envy
A sense of failure
Gladys
Curtains opened +A party
A sweet victory
A sense of loss
What if…?
结尾2（158）
18个新词(组)
behind, directly outside behave, realize, drive, follow, describe, voice, innocent, embarrassed,
faster
12个新词(组)
语言定位
记叙类故事文
句式选用：
行为动作： “主语+谓语动词+宾语”
Paragraph 2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur... ______________________________创__意__故_事__结__尾________
语言定位
记叙类故事文 一致性
选词用词 句式选择
8
not thief
路遇一个路人帮人搬运普通行李箱，而 Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会
故事发展
时间：on Arthur’s way home 地点：along the Park Avenue near the First national Bank 背景：a long loud noise of an alarm from the bank
What if with no research or no findings? What if WP just copy YH’s idea?
Friendly cooperation Hostile competition Peaceful coexistence
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
Satisfaction Guaranteed 信息整理+ 思辨发散
Curtains closed Still victory? Loss?
Tony’s Report?
两篇文本（节选）
Wang Peng sat in his empty restaurant feeling very frustrated. It had been a very strange morning. Usually he got up early and prepared his menu of barbecued mutton kebabs, roast pork, stir-flied vegetables and fried rice. Then by lunchtime they would all be sold. By now his restaurant ought to be full of people. But not today! Why was that? What could have happened?
读后续写
浙江省黄岩中学
经典续写案例
红楼梦
曹雪芹
高鹗
争论点：契融合洽度度高低
文 学 家 ：情节发展是否和原八十回一致 语言学家：用词用句是否和原八十回一致
原叙事猜文本 读续写高效度结尾
两个要弄明白的问题：
原文有什么用？
原文
素 材
续写要写什么？ 理解 模仿
续写文
情节
核心
基调
矛盾
潜素伏
信材 息
“清楚明晰地讲故事”强调故事人物的行为和思想变化
语言定位
记叙类故事文
句式选用： 主从复合句少，并列复合句多
故事一环承接一环的时间发展和动作的延续
一组数据：
材料：12个含and的并列句式， 结尾1(153字): 6个并列句式；结尾2(158字):7个并列句式
主从复合句(以时间状语从句为主)
材料：when he was on the way to…, As he walked along…,
故事
语言
框架
设定
样题情节和语言特点分析
(1)情节基调的铺设：“向心性” (2)核心矛盾的预设：“发散性” (3)故事框架的搭建：“顺延性” (4)隐含语言的定位：“一致性”
情节基调
向心性
“A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day”。
verb (might, realize, continue, jump, race like the wind, learn, open, expected, describe, caught),
noun or noun phrase (a large sum of money, information)
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
1. M3U2 Come and eat here 2. M7U2 Satisfaction Guaranteed
虚构+趣味 思维+语言
叙事 文本
叙事 人称
第一、二、三人称
文 叙事 体 时态
…
叙事 方式
旁白/对白 口语/书面语
语言定位
记叙类故事文
叙事人称：“第三人”的身份讲述（第三人称作为主语）（直接引语除外）
比如，he, she, it, A funny thing, the young man, Park Avenue, Arthur等
读后续写策略
核心矛盾
情节基调
遣词用句 不着痕迹 语言文体 框架完整
情节走向 顺延逆转
情节内容 框架结构
合情合理 的创意
语篇段落
读后续写策略
1、挖掘情节基调，廓清核心矛盾，创造合情合理的创意故事外延。 2、理清叙事角度，把握顺延逆转，构建张弛有度的完整情节框架。 3、定位语言文体，模仿遣词用句，续写不着痕迹的语用叙事文本。
可能情节发展
1
thief
碰巧抓住抢劫犯（即结尾1）
2
the young man not thief
碰巧把刚从银行取钱赶路的人当劫犯，最后 到警局传来抓到劫犯消息
3 Money
碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人钱的小偷，最后
thief
到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消息，
another man
最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷
4
not thief
路遇一个路人帮人搬运装满钱的行李箱，而 Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会
5 6
the young man
thief not thief
错把普通小偷当劫犯，最后帮助抓到该小偷 错把路人当劫犯（即结尾2）
7
Other things
another man
thief
碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人东西的小偷，最 后到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消 息，最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷
顺延性
a young man
Stop, stop!
…?
Run after
Arthur
To the PS
故事框架
顺延 逆转
Paragraph 1:
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” ______________________________顺__延__故_事__发__展________
材料 Everyone had a different answer 结尾 The police caught the robber
事物状态：“主语+系动词+表语”
材料 Arthur was surprised, Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before 结尾 The man shouting behind is the bank thief, The man was innocent
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
虚拟
单元 课文内容
故事
M1U3 M2U4 M3U2 M3U5 M4U4 M5U3
M5U4
M7U2
Travel Journal – Journey down the Mekong Wildlife Protection – How Daisy Learned to Help Wildlife Healthy Eating – Come and Eat Here Canada “The True North” – A Trip on the “True North” Body Language – Communication, No Problem? Life in the Future – First Impressions Making the News – My First Work Assignment
叙事时态： 转述过去某个时刻所发生的事
用过去式或者与过去式相关的时态（直接引语除外）
比如 was on the way, walked, was surprised, started to run等
叙事方式： 旁白+对白（间接引语+直接引语）[主次分明]
No trouble at all, what happened Go to the police station, Stop stop, Help help。
叙事时态： 过去式 结尾方式：出人意料
Come and eat here Satisfaction Guaranteed
两个语篇的文本比较：
Come and eat here Satisfaction Guaranteed
旁白+对白（旁白为主） 书面语+口语 简单句式，小词常规词 行为变化
全旁白的形式 全书面语形式 复合句式，较高级词汇 情绪（心理）表达
叙事人称：第三人称； 叙事顺序：以时间发展
语言定位
记叙类故事文
叙事文本定位： 语言平实易懂的小故事
小词、常用词以及常见短语
funny VS. amusing，intriguing，diverting
一组数据：
结尾1（153）
adv or prep (behind, suddenly, until, obviously, already, later),
funny: cause amusement, laughter, etc.
(有趣的，可笑的)
“趣”
核心矛盾
Money or
Other things
矛盾中心
“情节核”
发散性
the young man or another man
关键人物
Thief Not thief
矛盾身份
箱子里 所属人
Young man 身份
After placing it on the …, Just as Arthur picked up…
结尾：As he was running…, The moment he go to…, Just as Arthur was describing… 时间提示词如at the moment, then, later等。
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
Come and eat here
WP + his empty restaurant
信息梳理 + 思辨发散
一个可能需要增加的阅读环节
Visit to YH’s + got the problem Do research
New sign and discount Competition was on
Claire didn’t want the robot in her house, especially as her husband would be absent for three weeks, but Larry persuade her or allow her to be harmed. It would be a bonus. However, when she first saw the robot, she felt alarmed. His name was Tony and he seemed more like a human than a machine. He was tall and handsome with smooth hair and a deep voice although his facial expression never changed.
Claire alarmed, disturbing, trust Tony
accompanied, protected, help
envy
A sense of failure
Gladys
Curtains opened +A party
A sweet victory
A sense of loss
What if…?
结尾2（158）
18个新词(组)
behind, directly outside behave, realize, drive, follow, describe, voice, innocent, embarrassed,
faster
12个新词(组)
语言定位
记叙类故事文
句式选用：
行为动作： “主语+谓语动词+宾语”
Paragraph 2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur... ______________________________创__意__故_事__结__尾________
语言定位
记叙类故事文 一致性
选词用词 句式选择
8
not thief
路遇一个路人帮人搬运普通行李箱，而 Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会
故事发展
时间：on Arthur’s way home 地点：along the Park Avenue near the First national Bank 背景：a long loud noise of an alarm from the bank
What if with no research or no findings? What if WP just copy YH’s idea?
Friendly cooperation Hostile competition Peaceful coexistence
“读后续写”与阅读课的契合
Satisfaction Guaranteed 信息整理+ 思辨发散
Curtains closed Still victory? Loss?
Tony’s Report?
两篇文本（节选）
Wang Peng sat in his empty restaurant feeling very frustrated. It had been a very strange morning. Usually he got up early and prepared his menu of barbecued mutton kebabs, roast pork, stir-flied vegetables and fried rice. Then by lunchtime they would all be sold. By now his restaurant ought to be full of people. But not today! Why was that? What could have happened?
读后续写
浙江省黄岩中学
经典续写案例
红楼梦
曹雪芹
高鹗
争论点：契融合洽度度高低
文 学 家 ：情节发展是否和原八十回一致 语言学家：用词用句是否和原八十回一致
原叙事猜文本 读续写高效度结尾
两个要弄明白的问题：
原文有什么用？
原文
素 材
续写要写什么？ 理解 模仿
续写文
情节
核心
基调
矛盾
潜素伏
信材 息
“清楚明晰地讲故事”强调故事人物的行为和思想变化
语言定位
记叙类故事文
句式选用： 主从复合句少，并列复合句多
故事一环承接一环的时间发展和动作的延续
一组数据：
材料：12个含and的并列句式， 结尾1(153字): 6个并列句式；结尾2(158字):7个并列句式
主从复合句(以时间状语从句为主)
材料：when he was on the way to…, As he walked along…,
故事
语言
框架
设定
样题情节和语言特点分析
(1)情节基调的铺设：“向心性” (2)核心矛盾的预设：“发散性” (3)故事框架的搭建：“顺延性” (4)隐含语言的定位：“一致性”
情节基调
向心性
“A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day”。
verb (might, realize, continue, jump, race like the wind, learn, open, expected, describe, caught),
noun or noun phrase (a large sum of money, information)