大学英语四六级考试写作题型分析及范文 (2)

大学英语四六级考试写作题型分析及范文 (2)

[例3]

directions:for this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic losing and gaining weight according to the following.your composition should be less than 120 words.remember that the contents of the outline should all be included in your composition.

outline:

the comparison of one‘s body to a car： the similarities and differences of one’s body and one‘s car.

1the ways for gaining weight and losing weight.

2my own practices.

[范文]

losing and gaining weight

the process of gaining or losing weight can be explained by comparing your car. first，your car can‘t run if there is no petrol or diesel oil. because it needs energy. the same thing happens to your body. your body also needs energy， the food you eat can be converted into energy，with which you can run， you can talk， you can do everything. second， if you eat too much you will gain weight. we know a car with too heavy load can t run quickly and safely. maybe it will break down. for the same reason， if you are too fat， it is also very inconvenient and dangerous. you might get heart disease，diabetes， and hypertension and so on. if such things happen，doctor would ask you to lose weight.

you eat too much and you don't take exercise， you ll gain weight. so if you want to lose weight you have to do the opposite. you will be on a diet. you will go out and do some exercises， such as， running， swimming， and playing football，etc. soon， you ll be back in good condition and good shape again.

as far as i am concerned， i get up and go to bed early， do plenty of exercises everyday，and pay special attention to the food i eat as well. i don t eat too much meat. instead， my diet consists of vegetables， fruits， eggs， fish， and beans. by doing this i can keep fit.

作者在这篇文章中先用比较对比法比较了人与车之间的相似之处：车需要汽油，人需要食物；车载的重物过多跑不快，人长得太胖既行动不便也存有隐患，因而过于肥胖的人就需要减肥。第一段的最后一句话起了承上启下的作用。接下来作者谈了如何减肥，最后很自然地过渡到作者自己的做法。

第三节关键词作文

关键词作文是根据作文题目以及所给出的关键词写短文。关键词的数目由几个到十几个不等。写这种题型的作文，要特别注意关键词的作用。关键词是短文内容发展的“路标”，在作文思路和写作内容上起着决定乾坤的作用。因此，写出的文章要把所给的这些关键词都用上，可以一句中用上几个词，也可以几句中用上一个词，只要能做到恰到好处即可。而且，要学会根据所给关键词的语义群分段。如果所给的关键词可以分为三组，那么，短文就可以写成三段。如果给出的关键词是两组，短文就可以写为两段。再者，要把给出的关键词用在刀刃上，即各段的主题句以及结尾的主题句都应该有关键词。

[例1]directions： for this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write a passage on

“the advantages of travel” based on the words and phrases given： advantages widen our knowledge， make friends， knowledge or geography，beautiful scenery， different lifestyle， customs and cultures， various foods，practice a foreign language，worth spending the time.

[范文]

the advantages of travel

whenever a college student is asked“what are you going to do this summer vacation？”the most probable answer might be“i am going to have a trip.”it seems that college students are fond of traveling very much. why？because travel has numerous advantages.

first of all,travel can widen our knowledge of geography,the knowledge of different customs, cultures and lifestyles of different places and countries. secondly, we can make friends and practice a foreign language through traveling. finally, travel is the best way of spending time. we can enjoy eating various local foods and seeing beautiful scenery.

in a word, we can benefit from travel in more than one way. it is worth spending the time.

作者在第一段中就用上了关键词travel和advantage，并很巧妙地利用because travel has numerous advantages这样的承上启下的句子来引出下文关于旅游的种种好处。最后又把关键词用在了文章的结尾处，强化了主题，不失为画龙点睛之笔

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