2018年上海高三英语一模作文范文汇编

2018年高三一模作文汇编

20XX年已接近尾声，还记得年初你为自己定下的小目标吗？不知你是否实现了你的小目标？发一个微信朋友圈来回顾一下吧（文中请不要出现真实的校名人名）。你的朋友圈文字内容需包括：

1. 你的20XX年度小目标；

2. 你为实现年度小目标所作的努力；

3. 你实现（或没有实现）年度小目标的经验总结。

范文：

My new year’s resolution for 2017 was that I should be able to communicate with foreign people in English. To achieve this goal, I had asked my English teacher for help. According to her suggestions, I made up a plan.

Firstly, I started with simply reading English articles and found many pronunciation errors in my reading after listening to the video tape of its recording. Then, I tried to learn phonetics and practice one syllable after another again and again. I started with a single word, then a phrase, a sentence, a paragraph and finally the whole passage. After 3-month practice, I was able to read an article fluently without making any mistakes in pronunciation. I felt happy. Next, I practiced my listening. By listening to a passage four times, I required myself to take it down without spelling errors or any information blank. Last but not least, I installed an app called Shanbei Oral English on my phone to practice both my listening and speaking. It’s like having conversations with a robot. I had to understand what it said to me and answer its questions accordingly. After practicing for almost 8 months, I had my first talking session with an American teacher in our school. I was proud of myself.

What I have learnt from this experience is something as a saying goes: no pain no gain. Though the process of learning could be dull and tiring, it’s worth all the efforts after I achieved my goal. Even if I didn’t, it’s still a valuable part of my life.

阅卷作文

8+8+4=20

The wonderful year of 2017 is drawing to an end. I remember that I set an annual goal to keep fit at the beginning of 2017, since staying healthy is crucial to ensuring my study, thus better prepare myself for Gaokao.

To achieve my goal of keeping fit, here are some efforts I’ve taken throughout the year. On the very first day of 2017, I downloaded a fitness app called Keep. Following the fitness instructions the app offered, I exercised every other night before I go to bed. Also, I did some research into the daily nutrition I need in order to stay healthy both physically and mentally, after which I devised a moderate dieting plan. Apart from the above, I’ve invited family members and friends to join me so that we can encourage each other and exchange fitness experience.

So far, the record shown on my fitness app shows that I’ve done well this year, reaching a record high of 200 training times in total. Although at times I felt like giving up because of too much study pressure and limited time, I’m glad I have stuck to my plan. It seems to me that anything is possible if I throw in all of my energy and passion, and most of all, perseverance. Some rules apply to study. So I hope I will keep such passion and strength to do my best in the coming 2018. （237 words）

点评：

1．文本结构段落清晰，符合作文题目要求。

1）第一段明确告知自己的年度小目标是什么；

2）第二段有总起句，段落中有清晰的标记词 (如also, apart from) 告知读者自己所做的努力，且努力的行为都非常具体。

3）第三段对经验的总结可以再和第二段的三个努力匹配些，a. 借助科技的力量(app)；b. 借助科学的力量（did research into the daily nutrition）; c. 组团抗击惰性。

2．在语言表达能力比较强的基础上，可以考虑文字的进一步精炼。是否有“废话”？字数建议不超过200（此学生语言能力强，中等学生160左右即可）。精练而准确的表达也是思维和表达功力的体现。

7+8+4=19

Greeting from the end of 2017! It’s now the time to conclude our yearly goals again. On the new year’s eve, I set up two goals for the year: to getter better grades and to lose weight and I’m proud to announce that I’ve accomplished the first one.

To realize the goals, much effort has been put in throughout the year. First of all, I changed my attitudes towards