雅思写作批改 (21)

一、大作文：

Nowadays, some criminals who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students about the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (250 words, 40min)

Recently, the criminals who have been in jails and become good citizens after that are regarded as the best directors to teach students the danger of committing a crime. Nevertheless, I strongly disagree with this opinion.

Admittedly, there is no doubted that the role of the previous criminals that turn to excellent civilians is paramount in some degrees, seeing that only they could have such close experiences on crimes and actually know the harms of committing a crime. Nonetheless, it truly does not mean that they are the best people to teach students.

The most obvious reason is that they are, in fact, not quite professional. For one thing, they haven’t got a certain degree on psychology or education, which indicates that they are not suitable to act as instructors for students. What’s worse, most of them are, as a matter of fact, bad educated and know little about the skills to talk to the youth. As a result, though they deeply hold the ideas that

it’s extremely dangerous to commit a crime, they possibly don’t know how to express their opinions in a decent way. Perhaps, in a pity, they will mislead the young generation.

Last but not the least, owing to the unpredictable power of idols, they, unconsciously, might set an example to those bad students. What I actually want to say is thatthey have been a criminal so they will remain even a pretty bit of the characteristics of criminals despite of being a good citizen now. That small behaviors are likely to catch by some of the students, which mightbe susceptible tothose students.

By and large, those criminals would not be the best people to talk to the youth about the danger of committing a crime, whereas they could help the professional teachers or psychologists to tell the students about such things related to crime. (46min+5min检查)

二、10个翻译：

1.经常参加体育活动能够提高人们的自信心，这不但对年轻人而且对老人很重

要。

It can enhance people’s confidence by taking exercises regularly, which is paramount to the youth as well as the age.

2.过度依赖计算器可能会对人们的心算能力有负面影响,对孩子的智力发展有

威胁。

It might be susceptible to people’s mental arithmetic ability if we rely heavily on calculators, which threatens the development of children’s intelligence.

3.很多女孩不愿意在男人为大多数的行业找工作，因为她们会面临在高职位升

迁中的阻碍。

Seeing that they will be confronted with the block promoting in a high position, lots of girls are not willing to seek a job chance in the field which man covers the majority.

4.环境问题比如温室气体的排放已经成为公共关注的焦点，因此一些规则应该

被实施来处理这些问题。

Environmental problems such as the emission of green house gas have been a focus of the public, and therefore some regulations are supposed to be carried out to handle those problems.

5.家长和老师应该努力去减少孩子看电视的时间，这样会保护孩子的视力，鼓

励他们做户外运动。

Parents and teachers should make great efforts to reduce the time that children watch TV in, which will protect the eyesight, and encourage them to do outdoor sports.

6.虽然艺术不属于学校的主要课程，但是它们在课程大纲里值得拥有一席之地，

因为这些科目能够给生活添色彩。

Thought arts don’t belong to the major course of school, they do have a place in the outline of course, seeing that those courses are able to add colors to lives.