英语作文讲评

范文( 范文(P30)
二、 对比观点题型
（1）要求论述两个对立的观点并给出 ） 自己的看法。 自己的看法。 1、有一些人认为 、有一些人认为…… 2、另一些人认为…… 、另一些人认为 3、 我的看法 、 我的看法……
今， 今， 经 为 响 们健康 严 问题 。 更为严 讨论。 学 现 更为严 ，针对这种现 开 讨论。请 讨论结果写 根据 讨论结果 ， 己 观 。
From my point of view, I think …. The reason is that …. As a matter of fact, there are some other reasons to explain my choice. For me, the latter is surely a wise choice .
The topic of ①-----------------（主题） （主题） is becoming more and more popular recently. There are two sides of opinions about it. Some people say A is their favorite. They hold their view for the reason that 的理由一） ②-----------------（支持 的理由一） （支持A的理由一 What is more, ③-------------理由二 理由二). 理由二 Moreover, ④---------------(理由三 理由三). 理由三
70%的同学认为
1.认为肥胖影响健康； 认为肥胖影响健康； 认为肥胖影响健康 2.肥胖的体型不美，会招致同学的取笑； 肥胖的体型不美，会招致同学的取笑； 肥胖的体型不美 3.中学生应该节食，锻炼，防止肥胖； 中学生应该节食，锻炼，防止肥胖； 中学生应该节食 4.已经超重的同学要采取措施减肥。 已经超重的同学要采取措施减肥。 已经超重的同学要采取措施减肥
如何算是一篇好文章？ 要 如何算是一篇好文章？ 点 1.覆盖了所有的要点 覆盖了所有的要点 覆盖了所有的 全 2. 应用了较多的语法结构 和词汇 词汇 句型 （高级）和 词汇,句型 高级） 语法多样化（较复杂） 语法多样化（较复杂） 连 接 词 3. 有效地使用了语句间的 连接成分， 连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 语言地道， 语言地道， 4. 语言得体
范文1 范文1：
An Announcement
Boys and girls, May I have your attention, please? I will tell you something important. We will have a roport on Information and English Study. We will invite Mr Li to give us a report. Mr Li is famous for his experience. I think he will tell us about his own experience and teach us how to learn English well. We will meet at 3:30pm on Friday. Let’s meet in the room 206. Don’t miss it. Everyone should be there on time and don’t be late. After the speech, we will have a discussion about the report. That’s all. Thank you!
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Hale Waihona Puke Baidu
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让人眼前一亮的句子： 让人眼前一亮的句子： 1. In order to inprove English teaching and learning skills, Mr Li will make a speech about Information and English Study. 2. ….because it is difficult for us to live when we enter into society without English common sense. 3. The report/lecture will begin at half past three in the afternoon on Friday and it will be arranged in the Room 206. 4. it’s a good chance to learn how to study English well.
Nowadays fatness has become one of the serious problems which affect our health. And the situation in the teenagers is even worse. As to this, a discussion was carried out in our class. • 70% of the students think fatness has a bad effect on our health. Fat figures are not pretty and schoolmates often laugh at those who are overweight. So it is necessary for the teenagers to go on a diet and work out to prevent fatness. Those who are overweight should take measures to lose weight and keep fit.
NOTICE In order to improve the students’ spoken English, an English-speaking contest among the students of Senior Grade one will be held in the lecture hall at seven p.m. on November 15. It is organized by the Students’ Union. Those who want to take part, please sign up in the Students’ Union office before November 10. Five English teachers will be invited to work as judges. The first 8winners will be given prizes. Everyone is welcome to take part in it. The School Students’ Union November 5, 2011
范文2 范文2
An Announcement Boys and girls, May I have/take your attention, please? There will be a lecture at half past three on Friday afternoon. It’s about Information and English Study. And it will be given by Mr. Li Hua, who is a famous teacher from the English Department. There’s sure to be something instructive and interesting. We can get more information from it, I think. And it will improve our English studies to a new stage. Anyone who wants to attend it can come to Room 206. take notes and have a discussion after the lecture. That’s all! Thank you!
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However, 30% of them have a different opinion, saying losing weight will have a bad effect on the teenagers during their growth course, as well as their studies. But taking exercise is necessary, which can make you strong and energetic. • In my opinion, I don’t think it is wise to damage our health for a slim and attractive figure. We aren’t supposed to be ashamed of our figure. If we eat properly and work out regularly, I think we look great as we are.
注意点： 注意点：
• 1. 格式 • 2. 语言上的表达 • The report is…,the time of the report is…, the place is… • 英语组 English group (×) English Depertment (√) × • 3. 时间、地点的正确表达 时间、 • 星期五下午 点半 星期五下午3点半 in chassroom 206 on Friday at half past fifteen (×) × 习惯上先时间状语后地点状语(由小到大 由小到大) 习惯上先时间状语后地点状语 由小到大 at half past three on Friday afternoon in Room 206 (√)
30%的同学认为：
1.认为青少年是长身体的时候，减肥会影响身体发育，也会影 认为青少年是长身体的时候，减肥会影响身体发育， 认为青少年是长身体的时候 响学习。 响学习。 2.进行锻炼是必要的，锻炼会让人精力充沛，身体结实。 进行锻炼是必要的，锻炼会让人精力充沛，身体结实。 进行锻炼是必要的
你的观点：……
换一种说法 We do have different opinions on this matter. / There are two sides of opinions about it. Most of us (about 70%) think / hold the view that ..... What’s more, ….. At the same time / Moreover ….. While others think …. in the following three reasons. Firstly, …. Secondly (besides), ….. Thirdly (finally), …
规范
一、 How to write a Notice
通知一般有口头通知（ 通知一般有口头通知（oral notice） ） 和书面通知(written notice)两种形式。 两种形式。 和书面通知 两种形式 无论哪种形式至少要包括：时间、 无论哪种形式至少要包括：时间、地 活动内容。 点、活动内容。 A.口头通知（announcement） 口头通知（ 口头通知 ） B.书面通知（notice） 书面通知（ 书面通知 ） （学海导航）P26&P30 学海导航）