读后续写公开课1

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情走向
融入关键 词，想象 细节拟写
草稿
丰富细节， 润色
Step 1 精读文章，搞清思路
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ________________
Step 3 拟写草稿，用上关键词
• 怎样让记叙文生动起来呢？
• 动作描写2-5个
• 环境描写1-2个 • 对话1-2个 • 表情或心理1-2个
• 已给提示词汇：dad ，Uncle Paul，farm house，river，feed，sheep，late，track， get lost，sight话题激活词汇： • 情感：panic，relief，nervous，worried • 动作：run，cry，think to oneself • 环境：scenery，mountain，range，valley， river，lake，forest，sun，set，wind，blow
结构紧凑 第二档 与所给短文有一定的 写出了一些有关内容，应 语法结构单调，词汇项 较少使用语句间的连接
（6-10分） 关 系 ， 与 所提 供 的 各 用了3个以上短文中标出 目有限，有些语法结构 成分，全文内容缺少连
段 落 开 头 语 有 一 定 程 的关键词语
和词汇方面的错误，影 贯性。
度的衔接
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to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the
morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The早da上y s我ta帮rts忙at da鸡wn，o父n my
评分标准
• 得分要素： • 与所给短文及段落开头与的衔接程度 • 内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况 • 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性 • 上下文的连贯性 • 扣分标准： • 总分25分，按五个档次给分 • 根据内容及语言初步定档 • 词数少于130的，扣2分 • 单词拼写及标点符号使用情况，视其对交际的影响程度酌情处理 • 书写较差以至于影响交际，可酌情降低评分档次
评分细则
评分档次
第一条
第二条
第三条
第四条
第五档 与所给短文融合度高 ，内容丰富，应用了五个以 所使用语法结构和词汇 有效地使用了语句间的
（21-25分） 与 所 提 供 的 各 段 落 开 上短文中标出的关键词语。丰富、准确，可能有些 连接成分，使所续写的
与头原语衔文接合剧理。情融洽，
许错误，但完全不影响 短文结构紧凑。 意义表达。
词 语法结构和词汇 第三档 与所给短文关系较为 写出了若干有关内容，应 应用的语法结构和词汇 应用简单的语句间连接
（11-15分） 密切，与所提供的 各 用了四个以上短文中标出 能满足任务的要求，虽 成分，使全文内容连贯。
段 落 开 头 语 有 一 定 程 的关键词语。 度的衔接。
多有意一义样些表错达准语误。，确句但不间影响衔接自然，
headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that
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Uncle lost!”
“我O们K!”骑马my就dad cri了ed，ba风ck. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out
yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn‘t going to take a horse ride by myself
anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy h他at们s, 叮go嘱t o晚n 餐ou别r horses，, a沿nd
sheep
Don’t be late for supper!
Uncle Paul, farm house
My dad
feed the chickens
track
River
Step 2 回扣原文，设计剧情
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. _______________
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
响了意义的表达。
第一档பைடு நூலகம்（1-5分）
与所提供的短文和开 产出内容较少，很少使用 语法结构单调，词汇项 缺乏语句间的连接成分， 头语的衔接较差。 短文中标出的关键词语。 目有限，有较多语法结 全文内容连贯。
构和词汇方面的错误， 严重影响了意义的表达。
解题思路
搞清原文 剧情
回扣原文， 结合段首 句确定剧
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn‘t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.【答题时需注意】
逻辑合理续写内容丰富有 第四档 与所给短文融合度较 内容比较丰富，应用了五 所使用语法结构和词汇 比较有效地使用了语句
（16-20分） 高，与所提供的 各段 个以上短文中标出的关键 较为丰富、准确，可能 间的连接成分，使所续
看点，用了关键 落开头语衔接较为合 词语。
理。
有些许错误，但不影响 写的短文结构紧凑。 意义表达。
Continuation writing
读后续写
什么是读后续写？
• 提供一篇350词左右的材料（一般是记叙文，且 以事件发生的时间为序），短文中会将10个关键 词画下划线。 • 根据该材料的内容情节等将其发展为一篇150词 左右的逻辑合理情节完整的短文。 • 需要续写两个段落且要用到至少5个关键词，每 个段落都给出了第一句。
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 l50 左右； 2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
读后续写考查什么？
• 核心素养： • 语言能力：阅读和写作 • 思维品质：想象能力和创新精神
• 具体说来，应该是这四个方面 • 把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力 • 语言运用的准确性和丰富性 • 对语篇结构的把控能力 • 创造新思维能力
【2018浙江高考真题】
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late
afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us
the sheep out to graze (吃草). horses. They looked really cool.
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